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Re: Salem Senryū
by Droj » Thu Sep 06, 2012 10:29 am
***** the Treaty!
loftar wrote:I not like, you not get
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Re: Salem Senryū
by TotalyMoo » Thu Sep 06, 2012 12:15 pm
Smell scent
Instantly recognize
Dog human
Instantly recognize
Dog human
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Re: Salem Senryū
by Ass_Kraken » Thu Sep 06, 2012 11:13 pm
City upon a hill
Made by man
Discover shift click
Made by man
Discover shift click
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Re: Salem Senryū
by Sevenless » Fri Sep 07, 2012 1:55 am
Brave fisherman
Thinks of England
And the fish not caught
Thinks of England
And the fish not caught
It's been neat to see the evolution of a game. Salem has come so far, and still has far to go. Although frustrating, I think it's been an experience worth the effort.
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Re: Salem Senryū
by TotalyMoo » Fri Sep 07, 2012 12:08 pm
Sevenless wrote:Brave fisherman
Thinks of England
And the fish not caught
Apprentice fisherman
High five
I don't even
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Re: Salem Senryū
by fox » Fri Sep 07, 2012 4:59 pm
Shark Bait on rod
Pull Hard, Reel in
Long-Whiskered Catfish
Pull Hard, Reel in
Long-Whiskered Catfish
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Re: Salem Senryū
by Sevenless » Fri Sep 07, 2012 6:28 pm
fox wrote:Shark Bait on rod
Pull Hard, Reel in
Long-Whiskered Catfish
!!! I hope you're adding info to dah wiki
It's been neat to see the evolution of a game. Salem has come so far, and still has far to go. Although frustrating, I think it's been an experience worth the effort.
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Re: Salem Senryū
by Tonkyhonk » Mon Sep 10, 2012 10:01 am
thank you all for sharing your great works!
tip time!
let me pick 2 of them as examples.
i like it, but the last line "And the fish not caught" is a bit too "explanatory" for senryu or haiku standards.
maybe, "And the empty rod"? to show "no fish caught" without explaining it in words.
(well, if that is what you meant, that is....)
i personally love this too, but maybe we want a bit more sarcasm or irony for entertainment in here.
educational haiku's are called "hyougo" (slogans) instead, and often students are forced to make a few at school
e.g.
- hyougo -
A zebra crossing
Watch left, watch right, watch left again
Cross it with your arms up
- senryu -
Red traffic light
Everyone crosses together in group
No danger, no fear
tip time!
let me pick 2 of them as examples.
Sevenless wrote:Brave fisherman
Thinks of England
And the fish not caught
i like it, but the last line "And the fish not caught" is a bit too "explanatory" for senryu or haiku standards.
maybe, "And the empty rod"? to show "no fish caught" without explaining it in words.
(well, if that is what you meant, that is....)
fox wrote:Shark Bait on rod
Pull Hard, Reel in
Long-Whiskered Catfish
i personally love this too, but maybe we want a bit more sarcasm or irony for entertainment in here.
educational haiku's are called "hyougo" (slogans) instead, and often students are forced to make a few at school
e.g.
- hyougo -
A zebra crossing
Watch left, watch right, watch left again
Cross it with your arms up
- senryu -
Red traffic light
Everyone crosses together in group
No danger, no fear
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Re: Salem Senryū
by thl111 » Mon Sep 10, 2012 8:50 pm
Four iron bars half price
Someone is shouting
May fortune favour the bold....
Someone is shouting
May fortune favour the bold....
We make sword stone for keeper and pull they do it and excalibur come out. have no make stone to for sword we make sword box for sword to put sword in for sword. -Moniker (Anarchy online)
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