I'm writing a book and I could use some input

[Champie]

If you're going to add a character based on me to your book, please make her female. Thank you.

I really dont want another character when I have to give lots of attention to the fictional character MushMouth created by me, but if I had a female lady who was always ruining things that were fun for the people who can read my book then they might think there could be some serious sexy stuff and maybe even weird stuff that makes the fictional character MushMouth created by me act strangely and confused about how good he is and maybe not good enough at all and then he has to take advices from (oh ****, now I have to add another character but it might be worth all the hard work plus I have plenty of pages in my notebook for anther character as long as he isnt important and takes up a lot of. I know that there are things like plot devices that I could use (and other things I've seen and heard about) to make neored into a character and not just give him credits on the back cover, or probably just the inside cover because really this is not a big budget thing...what was I saying? Oh yeah, this can be way more awesome than even I thought it could be because I wasnt thinking big enough, but yeah, I need a name for the neored character but please dont tell allot about him or I might just not do it if it gets to be too much. I really need help with this name for the bad guy turned good who wants me dead but maybe he even saves my life at the end. But not because he is imortant but maybe because he is a nobody and just when the fictional character MushMouth created by me meets the neored guy for the first time they both see that when they wanted each other to dies before, now they are like dude, me and you are the same we are people with flaws and stuff and then they accept the fallibility as humans and then real awesomeness happens

But I need a name for neored or I dont know if it is worth it to do all that instead of some other awesome thing that doesnt need another character to make my book good and people really go Whoooo!!!!ya

[Champie]

just a quick bump because I hope some people are coming over here to read what I got so far and I want to be sure that I really let them know that we are going to really do this because all I need is a little help and I can give credits to so many people even if I have to make the inside front cover bigger than the rest of the book just to fit in all the peeps who help me make it happen!

If you are scared dont be too scared becuase neored and Totlly Meow are already characters, even though they are bad guys neored (I need a name so badly but it has to be really plain but also make a really big impact so that people remeber that guy who was a douche but because of that and the fact that he is below average in most ways but still a human that the fictional character MushMouth created by me can relate to enought to actually save the life of the fictional character MushMouth created by me. Amazing **** and maybe if you give me just a little idea you could be in the background,(no name, this **** is hard enough) but just a person guy or gal doesnt matter, can just be like on a bench reading a paper and maybe you make a noise with the crumpling paper that distract the fictional character MushMouth created by me when he is talking to that guy (which needs to be named becuase he is neored) who saves his life. Ther could be other people too, if you want me to add a real life friend of yourse sitting with you I can do that but he or she has to share the credits line in the front cover becuase this **** could get CRA CRA!

[Suffragium]

just a quick bump because I hope some people are coming over here to read what I got so far and I want to be sure that I really let them know that we are going to really do this because all I need is a little help and I can give credits to so many people even if I have to make the inside front cover bigger than the rest of the book just to fit in all the peeps who help me make it happen!

If you are scared dont be too scared becuase neored and Totlly Meow are already characters, even though they are bad guys neored (I need a name so badly but it has to be really plain but also make a really big impact so that people remeber that guy who was a douche but because of that and the fact that he is below average in most ways but still a human that the fictional character MushMouth created by me can relate to enought to actually save the life of the fictional character MushMouth created by me. Amazing **** and maybe if you give me just a little idea you could be in the background,(no name, this **** is hard enough) but just a person guy or gal doesnt matter, can just be like on a bench reading a paper and maybe you make a noise with the crumpling paper that distract the fictional character MushMouth created by me when he is talking to that guy (which needs to be named becuase he is neored) who saves his life. Ther could be other people too, if you want me to add a real life friend of yourse sitting with you I can do that but he or she has to share the credits line in the front cover becuase this **** could get CRA CRA!

Neored nickname: Deroen

One-liner for a character which is not Meow, Neored or MushMouth created by you: NOT THIS **** AGAIN

[Champie]

I might not be able to respond to all the suggestions that will likely be coming and I want to make sure everyone gets to be apart of this new book, but I think that I have so many good ideas that even though neored and totally Meow gave me a really great thing to do with the story it really wont be very good unless I really make it good with my writing. so all idas are wanted and still even paragraphs and one liners or short stories you were going to thorw awy I can add my writing and make it all useful and I;m not concerned with running out of notebook paper because even though the budget is tight and I am really determined anyway, notebooks are not too expensive if I need another especially if I have to add lots of names of fill up empty space with intersting characters that are doing things that make you go "hhhm??"

Ok, no more teasing you with all that and making you think you have nothing to contribute but you should just tell me whatever you want because I can stop for a minute and think about it all creatively and go "bam!" here's a really cool part that I made from your scraps that you didnst want so you posted them here!!!!!!!!!! I try not to get excited but really you guys should totally be supporting me and dont worry, youk know Ican write and amke an awesome book because look what I have done sao far and how interesting Imade it sound just describing it to you in a really cool way (and just describing things is kinda boring especially if it goes on for like 2 or 3 sentences! for real??? That **** isnt typically necesaary and should be avoided, but I bet you didnt even realize how boring all my descriptions were because I made yopu see things lik Bam! and Pow! and then wonder who that lonely person is on the bench rustling the newspaper and distracting the fictional character MushMouth created by me who is getting his freakin life saved by some jerkoff who was bad but because he was below average and really didnt understand even his own thinking and said thing that seemed ridiculous to other people, he still saved the life of the fictional character MushMouth created by me because they related by being human. I dont know if I wantt to make everyone have empathy because that crap drags the enthusiasm out of people who can read and it makes them really not like books, but I can make it different so that you get a really "OOOoh!! huh" type of beginning, and I mean right away, not 10 pages later and after you already quit reading because you never got captured by the important part and got stuck muddling through descriptions of things that really dont seem important and if they are important its probably so far into the book, like maybe even 40 pages!! that it is no longer fun and the reader goes to play Cookie Crunch or maybe one of those fine games we've all heard so much about that some new game company made on their way to buying some other game company that couldnt do what they wanted so they gave up because as it turns out making games is not easy even on technical level but probably easy just to write on paper or in notebokks and maybe use some google images or clipart to really make it pop, I dont know but thats why I want to write books because I know that I saw a book and I knew right away without hardly reading it that if I had a few good ideas I could make it way better and then show all the people who thought the original was good that this **** is easy if you think alot about it and then say f"***** A man this **** practically writes itself and with my creativety and lots of talk I bet Ican make the beginning (the very beginning not 10 pages in) make the reader say that they are going to keep reading!!!! And it will payoff because I got ideas for the middle and the end, and maybe if I havent written too much I could add a twist at the very very end (like last 2 pages) that would definitely surprise everyone and want a trilogy ro a whole series!!!!!!! ***** yeah I am excited so I am going to write this ***** now.

[Kreek]

"Each face in the crowd looked upon the shadowy figure that stood before them. Its back turned and shuttering. With a heavy, wheezing voice it muttered to itself, 'You could of had it all...' As the villagers stepped closer, the figure began to laugh. With each step the laughter grew louder and darker. A fearless man at the front of the mob, clutching a fiery torch in his left hand, reached out with his right. Then came a sound, so immense it could be heard far away on the coast. There were no screams. There were no survivors. The figure had revealed itself to be ______________."

[Suffragium]

"Each face in the crowd looked upon the shadowy figure that stood before them. Its back turned and shuttering. With a heavy, wheezing voice it muttered to itself, 'You could of had it all...' As the villagers stepped closer, the figure began to laugh. With each step the laughter grew louder and darker. A fearless man at the front of the mob, clutching a fiery torch in his left hand, reached out with his right. Then came a sound, so immense it could be heard far away on the coast. There were no screams. There were no survivors. The figure had revealed itself to be ______________."

The mountain called Monkey had spoken.

[Kreek]

The mountain called Monkey had spoken.

This guy gets it.

[Champie]

Neored nickname: Deroen

One-liner for a character which is not Meow, Neored or MushMouth created by you: NOT THIS **** AGAIN

Wow, if I can't do something spectacular with this then I would be disappointed in myself but I dont really feel that way, i know that once I work on those other characters that there is goingto be a point where someone (nobody I already mentioned) is really just gonna come out and say "NOT THIS **** AGAIN" but it definitely wont be the fictional character MushMouth created by me because that character has flaws that most people would say "not worth having around" except that he gets his lifee saved and so we think maybe he is ok (but I havent decided if he is ok because I think in the beginnig (after the reader gets all OWOW, yah! over the first couple sentences) he really becomes a bore but you are so surprised that the fictional character MushMouth created by me is not really interesting at all you become interested in how he is here and why you care and stuff that you read some more until you understand that Deroen (thanks suff! you on the inside cover for sure-let me know if you want to be in the background somewhere or with a friend or even you mom or dad )(why not, right goota keep it interesting) I can do that but not now for reasons I've explained before.

Well, I have to think about things for a bit but I dont want to stop taking all the good advices and collecting names forthe inside front cover, so I am going to really work hard on this and pay attention to this thread so that awesome comes faster!

[Champie]

"Each face in the crowd looked upon the shadowy figure that stood before them. Its back turned and shuttering. With a heavy, wheezing voice it muttered to itself, 'You could of had it all...' As the villagers stepped closer, the figure began to laugh. With each step the laughter grew louder and darker. A fearless man at the front of the mob, clutching a fiery torch in his left hand, reached out with his right. Then came a sound, so immense it could be heard far away on the coast. There were no screams. There were no survivors. The figure had revealed itself to be ______________."

Wow those are some great words and I like how they are put together to really make it intense. I know we can make something like this or even just make this a bit better (not too much beccause if it is too good it might not sound they way I want and then readers will think that I tried too hard to be like this but messed it up

I am better if you give me stuff that I already think kinda sucks but just needs some oolala and jiggity jaggity type add-ons to really make the words fit to gether and make a buzz that makes readers keep reading until one of the improtant scenes like where Dereon saves the life of the fictional character MushMouth created by me. Also, I am not good at just filling in blanks of stuff that really gets weird by putting the words togethr strangely. I think that makes people just go right to their iphone or even a newer flipphone with a good cpu and web access and play stuff that is more exciting than reading my book if it had stuff like that in it - you know. So, I cant fill in the blank because it seems wrong for what I want to do, but I really like that you know of books with stuff like that and I bet that you have your own ideas that would make my book great because you know things that I dont try to remeber when I really need to figure out how all these characters are going to meet each other, at least by page 50, but hopefully before page 150 which is the middle of the shortest novel that can be awesome!

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TotalyMeow

[Kreek]

Your imitation of MM Inc. is uncanny.