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Salem Senryū

Postby Tonkyhonk » Tue Aug 28, 2012 2:17 pm

some culture here!
many of you must have heard of "Haiku", japanese short poetry, and "Senryū" is a similar type of short poetry but usually its more about irony and black jokes from the daily events. so i decided to make this thread to gather your great sarcastic Salem Senryu.

<original example>
Dorobou wo
Toraete mireba
wagako nari

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The robber
when I caught him
my own son


senryu is less strict on rules, i.e. you dont need a season word, nor cutting word, dont worry about 5/7/5 thing too much either. (i cant count morae in english anyways, so lets skip that.)
just make sure that you have certain rhythms and good sarcasm in there that others can understand and enjoy reading. never make it long.
*pro tip*
dont try to explain the situation in the poem itself, but try to draw readers' imagination with right words!
(if you feel it may need some explanations for readers, do it outside the poem.)

here is another that sabinati made a while ago, which i couldnt resist to use for my signature.
infinite branches
two leaves on a maple tree
welcome to salem


here is another i just made.
An indian feather
Detour around a long tall cliff
Forever loading


please show your wits!

*edit*
those who made it on the paper will receive a fancy small virtual medal designed originally, senryu version, that you could use in your signature to show your contribution to the Courant if you want.
ImageThe Order of Senryu
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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby TotalyMoo » Tue Aug 28, 2012 2:21 pm

tiny white rabbit
has pocketwatch
**** goes down
I never managed to figure out something clever for my signature on Paradoxplaza, and I doubt I'll do it here either.

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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby Bait » Tue Aug 28, 2012 2:22 pm

the tinder drill
it's always broken
i've killed myself
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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby TotalyMoo » Tue Aug 28, 2012 2:25 pm

walking in Salem
why not
in real life?
I never managed to figure out something clever for my signature on Paradoxplaza, and I doubt I'll do it here either.

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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby Tonkyhonk » Tue Aug 28, 2012 2:46 pm

TotalyMoo wrote:walking in Salem
why not
in real life?

Walking in Salem
Indian summer and occasional snakes
Heatstrokes in real life
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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby redwallwall » Tue Aug 28, 2012 3:00 pm

cricket and rabbit
Bug got more blood than animal
salem's logic
I am the Pootis Man, coming from Sandwich Land
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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby Qukatt » Tue Aug 28, 2012 4:52 pm

So much Beaver Meat
I Wish I had an ice cold
Refridgerator
can you make sword in box light sword so sword come out when opened? then if sword is back after sword, use light saber on box, and saber will be boxed after sword is out. - Battlebug (Sw:tor forums pre-wipe)
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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby staxjax » Tue Aug 28, 2012 6:28 pm

Welcome to Boston
What to do next
Forage for 23 hours
Of all the things I've lost, I miss my mind the most - Ozzy Osbourne

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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby staxjax » Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:13 pm

Beta keys are many
With pilgrims aplenty
Yet the New World still remains empty
Of all the things I've lost, I miss my mind the most - Ozzy Osbourne

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Re: Salem Senryū

Postby TotalyMoo » Tue Aug 28, 2012 11:08 pm

pilgrim studies
splits old log
computer out the window
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